Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
×


More from DeviantArt



Details

Submitted on
July 14, 2010
Image Size
391 KB
Resolution
677×965
Link
Thumb
Embed

Stats

Views
3,114
Favourites
130 (who?)
Comments
52
Downloads
40
×
Seeking, he would see by carriezona Seeking, he would see by carriezona
We go seeking,
looking for conscious meaning.

I doubt if there are any who know it, knowingly.

I thought to myself;

(he would
he would!
would be
would be!)

He would see -
he is so a part of the cosmos,
in me.
Add a Comment:
 
:iconthefallingbird:
thefallingbird Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011
amazing
Reply
:iconladydamedoctorbritt:
LadyDameDoctorBritt Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2011
This is definitely my favourite so far. Wowowowow <3
Reply
:iconspinningstarshine:
SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011  Student General Artist
I'm such a big fan of well-placed repetition (4th stanza) and not-quite-redundancies ("...any who know it, knowingly"). :heart: And as someone else mentioned, the rhythm is just right.
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2011   General Artist
Awh, you are too too kind.
Reply
:iconcrozzbonez1:
crozzbonez1 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2010
That one is taking me apart. I love it
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2010   General Artist
hehe... I love that phrasing. Thanks so much.
Reply
:iconszmermel:
szmermel Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
amazing!
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2010   General Artist
Thanks!!
Reply
:iconkaturon:
Katuron Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2010
Have I ever told you how amazing it is that you consistently create thing like these? friggin' epic, seriously :D
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2010   General Artist
Awh, thanks so much. I feel like they're just constantly so aching to be found.
Reply
:iconmusiicxmaniiac:
MUSiiCxMANiiAC Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
You've been featured :D [link]
Reply
:iconsad-roses:
sad-roses Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010  Student General Artist
You have an eye for beauty.
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010   General Artist
Awh, you are too too kind.
Reply
:iconwaitin4blood2flo:
waitin4blood2flo Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010
This is so creative and awesome!
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010   General Artist
Thank you lots!
Reply
:iconberceuses:
Berceuses Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010
Wow, this is beautiful. I love it. (:
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010   General Artist
thanks!
Reply
:iconkathrine554:
kathrine554 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010  Student
i think i just read something good here........
thank you...........
take care.........
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010   General Artist
Oh I'm glad you liked it. Thanks!
Reply
:iconvigilo:
Vigilo Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010  Student Writer
Very wonderful. I just love the beat and - everything.
It's just wonderful. <3
(About the journal-pages you used for the 'Sea' one - do they ship anywhere? Because looking at those journals, I wouldn't mind having one myself.)
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010   General Artist
I'm not sure what their shipping requirements are, but the gentleman who runs it, his name is Jacob, and he's absolutely wonderful. I think he'd be accommodating.

And thank you!!
Reply
:iconconatgion:
conatgion Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010
:+favlove:

and what a rhythm!
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010   General Artist
hehe, thank you! It sounds a little cumbersome in my mouth when I read it... I'm glad it sounds nice to you! Makes me feel much better.
Reply
:iconmode-de-vie:
mode-de-vie Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010  Student Writer
I love the section of various he would, would be's, and how it sounds melding into that final stanza. :) Awesome work.
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010   General Artist
thank you darling. It started out feeling so profound, and then turned into a silly love letter... I guess it -has- to at least -sound- good, yes? haha.

Thank you, again, and as always.
Reply
:iconmode-de-vie:
mode-de-vie Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010  Student Writer
It sounds lovely. :) And there's nothing wrong with silly love letters. ;)

You're very welcome. :hug:
Reply
:iconzelrox:
zelrox Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010
Part of the cosmos in me....

I love it.
I love the love in it.

It makes me really hope for people, for people to do well, and be happy. In that, I can see happiness.
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010   General Artist
Mmm. You seems to be quite in tune with the "love" in my pieces.

What's all this talk of finding happiness in other people's happiness? Get happy, fool. The cosmos is not waiting for you.
Reply
:iconzelrox:
zelrox Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010
I like to think I'm quite in tune with love in general. I love love.

I didn't say finding it, I said seeing it.
I have my own happiness :)
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010   General Artist
Mmm, well that's much better.

I love love, too. I often worry that I use the word too frivolously... but really, I don't think I do. I think there's just a driving force, a little in everything, that can't be anything but "love" --

It's fucking important.

Thank you, as always, for all those lovely words.
Reply
:iconzelrox:
zelrox Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010
Thanks, by the way, for trying to make me find my own happiness when you thought I didn't have any. (Or at least, I think that's what you were doing.)

I've had that thought, but I think if you mean it when you say it, then how can it be anything BUT love? It's a driving force that can force people to do things that they would normally never do, and help people to become the person that they need to be. Like you said, it's a driving force. One of the (if you ask me THE) most important things in the world.

You're welcome.
Reply
:iconhollowvalentyne:
HollowValentyne Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010  Student General Artist
beautiful
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010   General Artist
Awh thank you. You are always just too lovely.
Reply
:iconhollowvalentyne:
HollowValentyne Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010  Student General Artist
you're welcome, but its not too lovely if i mean it
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010   General Artist
:heart: :heart: :heart:
Reply
:iconhollowvalentyne:
HollowValentyne Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010  Student General Artist
now you see, THATS too lovely
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010   General Artist
haha, no no, there is more than enough little hearts of love, for everyone.
Reply
:iconhollowvalentyne:
HollowValentyne Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010  Student General Artist
i disagree, but lets not go there ^^
Reply
:iconnytag:
nytag Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh man, you won me over again!
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010   General Artist
Ahaha! glad to have you back on the team. lol. How are you?
Reply
:iconnytag:
nytag Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
HAHA, what! I was never on any other team, lol! How am I...hmm, I wish I had more time to draw and schtuff, but I've been working a lot lately. Yourself?

BTW, thanks for the watch! Too bad I don't have any awesome poetry to show off like you do. 8(
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010   General Artist
I've mostly been working, too. I just find time to scribble whenever possible. Gotta stick it to 'the man' somehow.

Art is beautiful, even if it's brief!
Reply
:iconnytag:
nytag Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I feel you! After all, something's gotta being paying for these art supplies, haha!

Well said. Maybe I'll quote you on that sometime!
Reply
:iconcrossdressermonkey:
crossdressermonkey Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010
Love it. :)
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010   General Artist
Thanks!
Reply
:icontunasaladsonnet:
TunaSaladSonnet Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010
Ffff, absolutely adorable. :heart:
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010   General Artist
lol, adorable?

I guess maybe it is. thank you!!!
Reply
:icontunasaladsonnet:
TunaSaladSonnet Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010
I think it was the repetition/reversal of the (he would / he would!) that struck me as adorable. ;D
Reply
:iconcarriezona:
carriezona Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010   General Artist
hehe.. like a school kid, raising their hand with the correct answer;

Ooh ooh, he would he would!

Like he knows the truth of conscious meaning.

That's delicious. Thank you again.
Reply
:iconwaterproofwarlock:
WaterproofWarlock Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010
I give it 5 stars thats prettty deep.:iconstarsplz:
Reply
Add a Comment: